Recount Writing

This term Room 13 have been focussing on recount writing. We are working hard to make sure that our stories are interesting for our audience.
These are the things we are thinking about:

• using adjectives
• adding detail
• using interesting words
• long and short sentences
• different sentence starters
• similies and metaphors

Here are some examples of recounts about a shopping experience...

Going Shopping by Micheal 7 years old
One day, I went to the Warehouse. I asked my mum if I could look at the toys. I insisted. I... saw a Nerf gun. It was the fastest shooter. It is like a machine gun. I went back to my mum and I announced to her that I wanted the best Nerf gun ever! Then my mum had an awkward face. She said "yes." I was satisfied!!!

Moaning Sister by Meipera 7 years old
When I went shopping my sister was moaning because she wanted a lolly. She asked my mum and she shouted "no!" She kept asking my mum but she said "no." I had money and she asked me but I wanted to buy myself a lolly so I bought myself a lolly at the counter. She asked my mum "can I have a lolly?" My mum replied "ok then..." I laughed at my sister when we left the shop. My sister got really angry at me and my mum. She went red, so red that she was made out of fire. I grew up. I went with my mum and ofcourse my sister and dad. I was laughing in the car almost all the way home. My mum bought milk and bread. My sister says "you can get milk and bread but don't buy me a lolly!"